The Creation of the Mysterious Snake
WALT write the middle of a narrative
using features of good writing
Features of
good writing
A good writer
doesn’t get it right
straight away.
They always have
to check and edit.
Check what you have written so
far and see which features you’re
struggling to include
Make these your focus for
the next part of the story
Use your plan to help write up the next part of your
story – you are writing up event 3 and 4 today.
Describe this part of the story
Adjectives
Verbs
Adverbs
Remember to
keep checking
your plan as
you write.
Don’t forget to
include all of
the lovely
descriptive
vocabulary you
came up with.
Word Bank
Minute
silky
glinted
Charcoal
velvet brown
mysterious
Curved
straight
soft
Fluffy
sharp
slithered
Spread
stretched
arched
Wriggled
danced
flickered
long, pointed face wide, bulging eyes
darted rapidly tongue like a crimson ribbon
narrow, flint green eyes glinted dangerously
deathly pale,
grizzled tuffs of hair
scaly skin
beady eyes
Use this word bank to
help you tick of
Adverbs
Expanded Noun
phrases
Enviously, Harry looked at Ben and Sue’s creations.
“I shall also create something wonderful,” whispered Harry determinedly.
“I shall make a snake!” Sue and Ben glanced at each other.
Leaning his head to one side, Little Ben asked “What on earth is a snake?”
“Oh, it is a wonderful thing, truly magnificent! It slithers and slides and
has tiny sharp fangs and a forked red tongue,” replied Harry, grinning slyly.
This made Ben feel very uncomfortable, it all sounded a little too strange
to him. A small frown started to form on his tiny, round face and he began
to chew the inside of his cheek nervously. A few moments later, Harry went
in search of things to make his snake. Carefully, he gathered clay, sticks
and shiny pebbles from the deep, cool pond. He gently lay them on the
ground.
Example
Pacing the ground excitedly, he tried to feel like a god feels when making a
creature.
“Slither snake, slither and hiss,’” called Harry as he willed the animal to
life. Slowly but surely, the scaly, fork tongued snake began to slither and
slide. It slowly coiled and uncoiled its long, muscular body towards Harry.
Without warning, the snake reared its head and bared its fangs and hissed
venomously at its creator. Harry jumped back in fear.
High up in the sky, a god awoke from her slumber. She looked curiously down
at the children below.
"Perhaps we should stop now," whimpered Ben, as he
"Yes, stop before you do something silly!" The god scolded. But the children
did not hear.
On the next slide, I’ve underlined some of the examples I've
used in my writing so I know what else I need to include.
Make sure you edit
your work using this
features list.
Enviously, Harry looked at Ben and Sue’s creations.
“I shall also create something wonderful,” whispered Harry determinedly. “I
shall make a snake!” Sue and Ben glanced at each other.
Leaning his head to one side, Little Ben asked “What on earth is a snake?”
“Oh, it is a wonderful thing, truly magnificent! It slithers and slides and has
tiny, sharp fangs and a forked, red tongue,” replied Harry, grinning slyly.
This made Ben feel very uncomfortable, it all sounded a little too strange
to him. A small frown started to form on his tiny, round face and he began
to chew the inside of his cheek nervously. A few moments later, Harry went
in search of things to make his snake. Carefully, he gathered clay, sticks and
shiny pebbles from the deep, cool pond. He gently lay them on the ground.
Example
Excitedly, Harry sets out to create a magnificent snake, drawing the attention of his friends. As he brings the creature to life, unexpected events unfold, leading to a divine intervention. The story highlights the power of imagination and the consequences of playing with forces beyond comprehension.
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WALT write the middle of a narrative using features of good writing
Features of good writing Check what you have written so far and see which features you re struggling to include A good writer doesn t get it right straight away. They always have to check and edit. Make these your focus for the next part of the story
Use your plan to help write up the next part of your story you are writing up event 3 and 4 today. Describe this part of the story Adjectives Verbs Adverbs Remember to keep checking your plan as you write. Don t forget to include all of the lovely descriptive vocabulary you came up with.
Use this word bank to help you tick of Adverbs Expanded Noun phrases Word Bank Minute silky glinted Charcoal velvet brown mysterious Curved straight soft Fluffy sharp slithered Spread stretched arched Wriggled danced flickered long, pointed face wide, bulging eyes darted rapidly tongue like a crimson ribbon narrow, flint green eyes glinted dangerously deathly pale, scaly skin grizzled tuffs of hair beady eyes
Example Enviously, Harry looked at Ben and Sue s creations. I shall also create something wonderful, whispered Harry determinedly. I shall make a snake! Sue and Ben glanced at each other. Leaning his head to one side, Little Ben asked What on earth is a snake? Oh, it is a wonderful thing, truly magnificent! It slithers and slides and has tiny sharp fangs and a forked red tongue, replied Harry, grinning slyly. This made Ben feel very uncomfortable, it all sounded a little too strange to him. A small frown started to form on his tiny, round face and he began to chew the inside of his cheek nervously. A few moments later, Harry went in search of things to make his snake. Carefully, he gathered clay, sticks and shiny pebbles from the deep, cool pond. He gently lay them on the ground.
Pacing the ground excitedly, he tried to feel like a god feels when making a creature. Slither snake, slither and hiss, called Harry as he willed the animal to life. Slowly but surely, the scaly, fork tongued snake began to slither and slide. It slowly coiled and uncoiled its long, muscular body towards Harry. Without warning, the snake reared its head and bared its fangs and hissed venomously at its creator. Harry jumped back in fear. High up in the sky, a god awoke from her slumber. She looked curiously down at the children below. "Perhaps we should stop now," whimpered Ben, as he "Yes, stop before you do something silly!" The god scolded. But the children did not hear.
On the next slide, Ive underlined some of the examples I've used in my writing so I know what else I need to include. Make sure you edit your work using this features list.
Example Enviously, Harry looked at Ben and Sue s creations. I shall also create something wonderful, whispered Harry determinedly. I shall make a snake! Sue and Ben glanced at each other. Leaning his head to one side, Little Ben asked What on earth is a snake? Oh, it is a wonderful thing, truly magnificent! It slithers and slides and has tiny, sharp fangs and a forked, red tongue, replied Harry, grinning slyly. This made Ben feel very uncomfortable, it all sounded a little too strange to him. A small frown started to form on his tiny, round face and he began to chew the inside of his cheek nervously. A few moments later, Harry went in search of things to make his snake. Carefully, he gathered clay, sticks and shiny pebbles from the deep, cool pond. He gently lay them on the ground.
